[arin-ppml] Revised - Editorial Change ARIN-edit-2020-9: Section 8 Editorial Clean-up

Mike Burns mike at iptrading.com
Wed Jul 28 16:13:58 EDT 2021


Hello,

I concur that Bill's changes make the text flow better.

Regards,
Mike Burns



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From: ARIN-PPML <arin-ppml-bounces at arin.net> On Behalf Of William Herrin
Sent: Wednesday, July 28, 2021 3:43 PM
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Subject: Re: [arin-ppml] Revised - Editorial Change ARIN-edit-2020-9: Section 8 Editorial Clean-up

On Tue, Jul 27, 2021 at 9:56 AM ARIN <info at arin.net> wrote:
> In Section 8.3.:
>
> Under “Conditions on source of the transfer,” replace “Number resources received as the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes of this restriction” with “This restriction does not include 8.2 transfers.”

Howdy,

They both seem about the same to me. The replacement is less clumsy than the original but still clumsy. Just throwing out some wordsmithing here:

Current;

The source entity must not have received a transfer, allocation, or assignment of IPv4 number resources from ARIN for the 12 months prior to the approval of a transfer request. Number resources received as the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes of this restriction.

Suggested:

Excluding section 8.2 transfers, the source entity must not have received a transfer, allocation, or assignment of IPv4 number resources from ARIN during the 12 months prior to the approval of a transfer request.

That seems to me to flow better.

Regards,
Bill Herrin


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