[arin-ppml] Revised - Editorial Change ARIN-edit-2020-9: Section 8 Editorial Clean-up

[William Herrin]

On Tue, Jul 27, 2021 at 9:56 AM ARIN <info at arin.net> wrote:
> In Section 8.3.:
>
> Under “Conditions on source of the transfer,” replace “Number resources received as the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes of this restriction” with “This restriction does not include 8.2 transfers.”

Howdy,

They both seem about the same to me. The replacement is less clumsy
than the original but still clumsy. Just throwing out some
wordsmithing here:

Current;

The source entity must not have received a transfer, allocation, or
assignment of IPv4 number resources from ARIN for the 12 months prior
to the approval of a transfer request. Number resources received as
the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes of
this restriction.

Suggested:

Excluding section 8.2 transfers, the source entity must not have
received a transfer, allocation, or assignment of IPv4 number
resources from ARIN during the 12 months prior to the approval of a
transfer request.

That seems to me to flow better.

Regards,
Bill Herrin


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