[arin-ppml] Draft Policy ARIN-2013-3: Tiny IPv6 Allocations for ISPs

[David Farmer]

On 4/5/13 10:07 , William Herrin wrote:
> On Fri, Apr 5, 2013 at 9:45 AM, David Farmer <farmer at umn.edu> wrote:
>> On 4/5/13 08:31 , William Herrin wrote:
>>> This could be misread to mean "/32 or /36 respectively" instead of
>>> "either /32 or /36 as the registrant chooses."
>>
>> That's was bugging me too, but I wasn't sure how to fix it.  How about;
>>
>> g. An LIR that requests a smaller /36 or /40 allocation is entitled to
>> expand the allocation to either /32 or /36 at any time without renumbering
>> or additional justification. ...
>>
>> Does that cover it without getting to wordy?
>
> Hi David,
>
> I'm not sure if "either" makes a difference. Maybe "expand the
> allocation to a choice of /36 or /32.: Might also help to reverse the
> order of /32 and /36 so that "respectively" doesn't fit right.
>
> Or redo the whole sentence as something like,  "A LIR that requests a
> smaller than /32 allocation is entitled to expand the allocation to a
> choice of /36 or /32 at any time [...]"

OK;

g. An LIR that requests smaller than /32 allocation is entitled to 
expand the allocation to a choice of /36 or /32 at any time without 
renumbering or additional justification. ...

>> e. All block(s) returned must not be in use by the organization or its
>> customers.
>>
>> Not a big change but it read a little better.
>
> It's the "All [] must not" construction that seems clumsy to me.
> Normally it's "all must" or "no may."

How about;

e. All block(s) returned are not in use by the organization or its 
customers.

Which should be read as;

ARIN will accept the return of whole or partial block(s) allowing an 
organization to reduce their holdings as long as: e. All block(s) 
returned are not in use by the organization or its customers.

Better?




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